This links back into the well-trod and oft-recited ‘show don’t tell’ rule. Characters need to display emotion. That’s a core part of what drags your reader in and helps immersion. How are readers supposed to attach themselves to a cardboard cut-out?
To convey emotion, you need to put yourself into your character’s shoes and show your readers. Simply saying ‘George was sad’ doesn’t give your reader much insight. How did you know he was sad? Was it the tears streaming down his face? The quivering bottom lip? That’s what you need to put in, show your readers, and use to help them look through the character’s eyes. … More Conveying Emotion